“Red Pen Rampage!” a.k.a “How’s My Query?”
Hey Everyone,
My Twitter followers have been listening to me giggle about finishing the final edits on my first novel, “Crossing Clouds” this week. Hooray!
Now, it’s time to write the query letter, and I’d love your input!
I’ve been thinking about my pitch for quite some time, but crossing the finish line on this past round of edits has definitely brought it to the forefront. Now I’d love to hear what YOU, my beloved readers, have to say about my pitch!
Love it? Bored? Have suggestions to make it stronger? I want to get your gut reactions, so get out the red pen!
Thanks a million!
Alone in the back of a limo on her wedding day, Cora Caffrey’s first love suddenly becomes a man from her past; her groom-to-be, Christopher, has left a letter at the church, and walked away.
Desperate to escape the well-meaning advice and sympathetic looks in the aftermath of that day, Cora astonishes everyone—herself included— and boards a plane for the village of Sevenoaks, England. The weeks pass, and soon it is clear that the brief reprieve from life in Connecticut has become something very different.
Cora is enchanted by life in the small village, and the longer she stays, the harder it becomes to part with it. Then, a misplaced wallet leads her to the doorstep of Alex Bishop, and her reluctance to return home blossoms into a desire to make a new one. But when Cora’s past visits her in the form of two little pink lines, everything about the burgeoning romance changes.
“Crossing Clouds” is a story about family. It is about discovering our desires, and the virtues we will abandon in their pursuit. The manuscript is complete at 79,000 words and is available for your review upon request.
4 Responses to ““Red Pen Rampage!” a.k.a “How’s My Query?””
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Congrats on finishing your final edits!
The pitch looks good to me, but then I’m not an agent or publisher, nor is romance my genre of expertise. So, “yay!”, but I digress to the more experienced of your readers here.
Oooh, just found this on the blog of an old acquaintance. Her Literary Agency is having a contest for possible representation. The agency isThe Knight Agency and they seem right up your alley. The details of the contest follow:
“Here’s a chance to have your project reviewed by one of the agents at The Knight Agency. Submit three compelling sentences (150 words max) about your completed, unpublished manuscript to submissions @ knightagency.net (delete spaces). Write BOOK IN A NUTSHELL in the subject line or it will not be deemed elligible. One submission per project, please. Twenty of the best submissions will be chosen and requested by various agents who will then give feedback on your work…and it may even lead to possible representation. Hurry, the deadline is April 20, 2009. Winners will be notified by May 1, 2009.”
Thought you might be interested.
-B
Hey B,
Good letter. might I suggest rewriting the first paragraph, though? the tense structure is odd, the ‘becomes a man from her past’ part had me re-reading several times to get the gist of it. Otherwise, best wishes on it!
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